F.O.R.M. Poetry__________Puente.

F.O.R.M.- Puente (revisited)
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Jul 20, 2010 9:17 am
F.O.R.M.- Puente (revisited)
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Jack Huber
Puente"Puente" means "bridge" in Spanish, and the so-named poetic form is built around one. This intriguing form was invented by poet James Rasmusson and described by ShadowPoetry.com.Interestingly, I was drawn to this form when I saw it because I grew up in La Puente, California, a community near Los Angeles.Constructed in three stanzas, the first and third are separate thoughts, conditions or elements, but share an equal number of lines and the center "bridge" stanza. This middle stanza is but one line and is enclosed in tildes (~) to distinguish itself as both the last line of the first stanza and the first line of the last stanza.The meter and rhyming are at the poet's discretion, free verse being perfectly acceptable. The title is has no guidelines; it need not match the bridge stanza like the example below.Example:The Dilettante's GardenThe heiress dabbles in chic baroque as ifeach artifact was made for her solitaryamusement, while commoners are unawareof her ardor for her superb private grounds,~the dilettante's garden~required an architect's touch, its designfirst penciled on a bit of used stationary,yet rendered a horticulturalist's dream,now a flawless, serene arboretum.Copyright © 2009 by Jack Huber
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Jul 20, 2010 9:51 am
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Diane Tegarden
Jack,you won't believe this but I grew up in Rowland Heights, the suburb "across the tracks" from La Puente, and graduated from Santana HS, a continuation school located in La Puente!Small world, eh?Thanks for this new FORM, I must have missed it the first time around,Diane T.Energetically, Diane Tegarden"Getting OUT of Limbo-A Self Help Divorce Book for Women";"Light ThroughShuttered Window- A Compendium of my Poetry";"Anti-Vigilante and TheRips in Time"- available at www.firewalkerpublications.com and www.Amazon.com
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Jul 20, 2010 11:58 am
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Maya Mahant
Jack, do you think this works, 'Form' is intriguing.... so gave it a try.Million BucksRoll of dice, click clack of the roulette wheel,blank faces, painted faces in anticipation wait.Bright lights, hazy with cigarette smoke, hush is palpable,The wheel slows, the dice stops, jubilation erupts.~ million bucks won ~money for dreams to turn true; home with a garden,hope for the children, to study, to make merry,succor for the needy, shelter for the homeless. To share, to give, to help, all this and more.Maya
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Jul 20, 2010 1:49 pm
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Jack Huber
Diane, I think you told me that once before and I mentioned that my dad owned the Texaco station on Colima and Fullerton Rds. (It had an 80 foot tall vertical sign you could see for ten miles), and I worked there as a teen. I may have even pumped your gas back in the 70's. In 1977-78 I lived in apartments behind Rowland Bowl.Jack
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Jul 20, 2010 1:56 pm
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Jack Huber
A very good first draft, Maya. Remember that the bridge line is part of both the first and last stanzas, as in:The wheel slows, the dice stops, jubilation erupts.million bucks wonmillion bucks wonmoney for dreams to turn true; home with a garden,So, perhaps "A million bucks won" would work better, and it could look like this:The wheel slows, the dice stops, jubilation erupts-~ A million bucks won ~makes dreams come true; a home with a garden,Jack
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Jul 21, 2010 1:16 am
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Pushpa Moorjani
Wow! this is fun...I like this form... :))
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Jul 21, 2010 1:42 am
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Maya Mahant
You are right Jack, it does sound better, thank you. Do you think I need to fine tune it?Maya
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Jul 21, 2010 4:16 am
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Stanley Shiel
This form is excellent; the bridge line has great pivotal possibilities.Stanley.Thank you Jack for bringing this form to public attention here.And as ever, Maya gives an example!
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Jul 21, 2010 9:33 am
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Manohar Bhatia
Jack,Jack,this one is very exciting and challenging.I think all these short forms have some type of mathematics invloved.Here is my one_____________--The Government Machinery.[The politicians indulge in adeadly game of rule,sorcery,fakenesswhere the citizens are crushedthe weight of this Monster~ The Government Machinery ~needs to knock out itsold nuts,bolts,washers,used oiland come up as a gorgeous new factorybuilt of, by and for the people.] ____ The End____copyright@ManoharBhatiaAll rights are reserved.Jack and others,please give your feedback.Thanks.Manohar Bhatia.
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Jul 21, 2010 10:32 am
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Manohar Bhatia
Hello,A minor correction to this line________ S1L4[under the weight of this Monster.]Manohar Bhatia.
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Jul 21, 2010 10:55 am
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Pushpa Moorjani
Thanks Jack.. I am loving this.....Ryze, facebook, twitter and other endless networksLeave little time for my important monthly health checksIt’s when BP shoots high and eyes can’t focus on groundThe limbs seriously weak, I feel my appetite tweak ~I know I must sit down to relax~Tired of walking for miles in search of butter and breadI wish I could get a phone call from my closest friendWho cooks delicious meals but nowadays doesn’t speak I am learning to apologize without a flattery cream.(c) Pushpee
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Jul 21, 2010 2:34 pm
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Jack Huber
Let's see if I can get this all in...Maya, thanks. By all means continue to fine tune your poetry until you are satisfied with it. Then, don't look back at it for at least a week.Stanley, I agree with you. Thanks for the comment.Manohar, nice puente. I would suggest that you add a comma after "Monster" to help bring the bridge line into that stanza. The following stanza does this very well.Pushpa, the great thing about your puente is that the last stanza is not just a continuation of the preceding lines, it is a new, though related, thought. This is the guideline many poets miss, but you've done beautifully. Maya and Manohar have also accomplished this, but to a lesser degree.Thanks, everyone, for your great postings.Jack
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Jul 21, 2010 3:27 pm
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Pushpa Moorjani
Thank you sooooo much Jack....I learnt something new today!!!
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Jul 22, 2010 6:48 am
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Manohar Bhatia
Jack,Thanks for your excellent comments.Yes, I will keep comma after Monster.Manohar Bhatia